Iya Ythmir

I loved it! I like how you put in a character as another living being. I've been toying with the same idea for months now but I never got down ...

It was a nice and wonderful story. And I agree with it being fresh. :shock: Your descriptions are nice and I don't mind them being the way they are. But ...

I agree with Avens Dolor about the ending. I feel waaaay cheated. What happens next? :shock: It could use some work with how the suspense was delivered but I really ...

Yes, I am still hooked! 8) I am so happy that she got away without putting up much fight. Having done so would have placed her as a kind of ...

Hmm, since so many have already posted comments on this, I don't have much to say. But I really, really, really like this one! I'm loving it! I'm into werewolf ...

Twice or thrice. Ever since school started, my daily ritual of YWS has been cut short. :cry:

Characterization, I guess. I don't really know but I love making people up. :D Then, once they're a bit vivid in my mind, I'd make them do things so I ...

I could almost feel Brian's pain. I love the way he described how being blind is. I never thought of it that way. All I ever see in written works ...

I really, really, really like this! The voice of the killer in the story is so smooth, so realistic. It's as if I can hear him narrating beside me, his ...

To answer your question, dear, yes, this one is much, much more realistic than the first. Macnair's use of the food tray suggests that simple human ingenuity can take anyone ...

The sequence of the events is thrilling. When Macnair was escaping, I almost thought that he'd get caught in the end. However, he didn't - which led me to wonder ...

Well, I'll second Scasha's suggestion. Though it is a very interesting prologue it all seems a bit rushed. Take time to explore the main character's feelings or if not, how ...

Suspenseful! I really liked it. Gah, I'm a sucker for manipulating-bad-person-types. 8) They always make my day. This piece made my mind wander on all the possibilities that could be ...

Hmm. What I want to point out first is that wine isn't red. Okay, so maybe I'm going a little overboard on that tiny detail but it's just that I ...

Like what those above me have said, this piece is more "dialogue-driven". Although I know what's happening through the things they say, I don't think it's going to work in ...